Some stuff I wrote late at night.

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Some stuff I wrote late at night.

Post by Nitrosys » Sun Nov 05, 2006 10:43 pm

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Post by dox » Sun Nov 05, 2006 10:57 pm

..what kind of response are you looking for? ..that's some pretty sad/dark stuff!
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Post by Nitrosys » Sun Nov 05, 2006 11:17 pm

nah nothing like that, I was just wondering if you think it is good written!
I write this stuff allot, and I'm not depressed I'm just writing.

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Post by Holyman » Mon Nov 06, 2006 1:22 am

Cut off your fringe and stop wearing makeup.

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Post by curtis84 » Mon Nov 06, 2006 8:27 am

Holyman wrote:Cut off your fringe and stop wearing makeup.
lmfao, i like dark stuff, but i get the feeling girl trouble. wheres the depressed stuff that isn't about love.
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Post by PhoeniX » Mon Nov 06, 2006 1:22 pm

You all seem to be missing Nitrosys' point. He asked about how you think his writing style/skill is, regardless of the subject. Correct me if I'm wrong though.

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Post by Holyman » Mon Nov 06, 2006 2:31 pm

PhoeniX wrote:You all seem to be missing Nitrosys' point. He asked about how you think his writing style/skill is, regardless of the subject. Correct me if I'm wrong though.
You're correct but it's also a good time to make fun of emo's!

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Post by Shaddowmaster » Mon Nov 06, 2006 6:39 pm

any time is a good time to make fun of those emo/goth clowns :)

anyway, I personally don't like that style of writing (not refering to that whole sad/dark/emo/goth style (which I more or less hate))
you see, no offense, but to me it feels like you're going for some deep poetry, but the dept of it goes a bit up and down

that kind of takes the edge of it
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Post by Nitrosys » Tue Nov 07, 2006 8:18 am

that's just some notes, I haven't created a whole poem yet, and j phoenix you are right. I was just wondering what you where thinking of my writing skill is, regardless of my subject.

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Post by curtis84 » Tue Nov 07, 2006 8:26 am

the style it ok, i would prefer to see darker. but like you have said they are notes and they are not bad so far.
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Post by weezer » Tue Nov 07, 2006 2:18 pm

good work, keep it up.

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Post by Coolshot » Tue Nov 07, 2006 2:52 pm

Nitrosys I do like you! You most be the craziest Mo Fo around!!!!!
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Post by Evil Ed » Tue Nov 07, 2006 9:27 pm

It's not my taste as i really dislike dark love poems and such, but it's alot of fantasy in there and shows that you're a good thinker regardless of what the subject is. I used to write war poems when i was 12-14 and my rich fantasy got me a pat on the back from my teacher and the "Nazi" title by some people in school. Keep it up, poems is a universal language, kinda like math.

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